2013高考英语书面表达讲义及训练（41）及参考范文：书面表达精选
28第五部分 书面表达（满分25分）
热衷于苹果产品的人称之为“果粉”。请根据下图，写一篇题为“Is Your Fashion Worth It?”的短文。短文必须包括以下内容：
1. 简要描述图中的情景；
2. 结合话题，说说你自身的经历，或者身边的人或事；
3. 谈谈你对追求时髦的看法。
ipad2首次发布之日，数千北京“果粉”云集某代理机构，争相购买这一主要功能为上网和娱乐的苹果产品。
注意：1. 可以根据具体情况作适当的发挥和想象；
2. 单词数：150左右；开头已经给出，但不计入总词数。
Is Your Fashion Worth It?
There are so many Apple fans in China, and it seems a fashion.
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书面表达：
One possible version:
There are so many Apple fans in China, and it seems a fashion. As is shown in the picture, when iPad2 was first released, thousands of them crowded to get one.
However, iPad2, which costs thousands of dollars, is nothing but a tool for surfing the Internet and entertaining. Apple fans around me use iPad2 to play games only. They have spent so much money on such a device to idle away their time. It surely isn’t worth the money.
There are many reports about young people, especially university students, who take great efforts, and even lifelong costs, to obtain an Apple product of their own as a fashion. I’m not against people going after fashions. But we should be aware whether the fashion is of any value, or worth our efforts and even sufferings. What’s more, fashions sometimes change so quickly that immediately we catch them, we are left behind.
As a young man, I believe it makes far more sense to find pleasure in pursuing something meaningful.
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写作试题：满分35分，主要考查考生书面表达能力，例如写正确句子的能力、使用精彩词
汇、短语的能力、所写文章逻辑性强的能力等。并且在有限的时间内容，快速写出好句、好文。
本课程要帮助学生掌握快速写句、写文、改错的方法。
强化训练一
结构
课程内容：短文改错 / 开放性作文
课程目标：把握改错方法，提高改错速度
课时：3
教学建议：
1、训练前教师可以安排学生思考高分作文的要素
写作考商
在写作前你是否先列提纲？
是否先写初稿，然后再修改、定稿？
写作过程中，会注意语法使用，尤其时态的使用是否正确？
会尽量避开生僻的词汇和没有把握的表达方法吗？
会用简单的语句间的连接成分，使文章结构紧凑吗？
是否能在高考前背诵30-40篇优秀范文吗？
2、限时训练后，教师启发学生自查问题，欣赏范文，明确问题
3、教师可以在表达方面进行重点说明，例如一词多义，短语优先，句式多样、连词使用。
4、短文改错核对答案后，教师要及时带读，巩固成果，提高语感，如果时间容许教师可当堂安排短文背诵默写，强化正确意识，学生才会对错误敏感。
5、写作限时训练后，教师要安排自查自改环节，然后再范文分析，通过范文分析反思自己写的文段。教师也可以根据学生的问题进行即兴强化训练，例如造句、翻译练习，巩固短语、连词等使用能力。
6、教师可以根据学生情况，灵活处理所提供的素材，例如短文改错的文段改为听写、短文翻译（中译英）等。
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仿真训练1
（做题时间：10分钟）
短文改错
One day, while my friend and I was traveling through 1. _________
Germany, we were not very hungry but we only had a little 2. _________
money. We decided stop at a village market to buy 3. _________
something to eat. We choose the cheapest biscuits and 4. ________
ate it under a tree. We thought the biscuits were great. 5. ______
“Let’s got some more,” I said, “They’re cheap and they 6. _____
really taste well.” My friend could read some German, but 7. _________
I couldn’t, and I gave her the biscuit bag to find the name. 8. _________
She looked at it and started to laugh, “How are you laughing?”9. _________
I asked. “Because they’re dog biscuits!” She said. 10. _________
解题技巧点评
短文改错通常考查以下几点：
1．一致性：时态、人称、数
2．动词用法：包括非谓语（动名词、分词、不定式）、系动词（后接形容词）、及物动词（无
需介词，直接跟宾语）或不及物动词（需加介词，再跟宾语）等。
3．上下文逻辑：肯定/否定；连词等。
One day, while my friend and I was traveling through 1. were
and为关键词（A and B），所以谓语为复数。
Germany, we were not very hungry but we only had a little 2. not
考查逻辑。下文but…only a little为关键词。
money. We decided ^ stop at a village market to buy 3. to
考查动词用法：decide to do sth.
something to eat. We choose the cheapest biscuits and 4. chose
考查时态。文章描述的是过去发生的事。
ate it under a tree. We thought the biscuits were great. 5. them
考查代词。此处代替上文biscuits，故用复数形式。
“Let’s got some more,” I said, “They’re cheap and they 6. get
考查动词形式（非谓语动词/不定式）：Let’s do sth.
really taste well.” My friend could read some German, but 7. good
taste为系动词，后接形容词作表语。well作形容词时只表示身体状况。
I couldn’t, and I gave her the biscuit bag to find the name. 8. so
考查连词。通过前后句逻辑解题，即I gave her…是I couldn't read German的结果。
She looked at it and started to laugh, “How are you laughing?” 9. why
考查疑问副词。通过前后句逻辑解题。
I asked. “Because they’re dog biscuits!” She said. 10. √
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仿真训练2
（做题时间：10分钟）
短文改错
It was a chance of a lifetime to win the first 1. _________
prize on the Story Writing Show. All I had to do 2. _________
was to write a story or present it. My teachers 3. _________
have been telling me how great my writing was. 4. _________
So if they had said was true, I would have a chance 5. _________
of winning the prize. What were better, I had useful 6. _________
help. There was Uncle Chen, gentleman living 7. _________
near my house, who was a very much famous writer. 8. _________
He agreed to reading my story and gave me some 9. _________
advices on how to write like a real writer. 10. _________
解题技巧点评
1．√——a / the / one's chance of a lifetime：千载难逢的机会。
2．on改为in ：考查介词。in the show。
3．or改为and：考查连词。write和present为并列关系。
4．have改为had：考查时态。通篇文章为过去时态。此处为过去完成进行时，发生在All I had
to do之前。
5．they前加what：考查句子结构。if引导的条件状语从句主语是个句子（was 是其谓语），
且主语从句缺宾语（said的内容）。
6．were改为was：考查数的一致性。代词what谓语动词用单数。
7．Uncle … 后加a：考查冠词。living near my house的gentleman因该不止一个，故用不定
冠词。
8．去掉much：very修饰形容词；very much修饰动词。
9．reading改为read：考查动词形式（不定式）：agree to do sth.。
10．advices改为advice：advice为不可数名词。
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